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tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 12:22 AM

It's time for Haiku!
Creative types, take some words,
And join them all up.

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 12:31 AM

Ah, my favorite
I miss the first haiku thread
It has half my posts

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 12:32 AM

Uh oh MacNN
Now you've gotten me started
There's no end in site.

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 12:36 AM

look at your post count!
Your 1 k milestone is near!
This thread should do it

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 12:40 AM

I'm off to college
The morning of saturday
Kansas here I come

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 12:41 AM

Originally posted by tintub:
look at your post count!
Your 1 k milestone is near!
This thread should do it

Damn I suck at these
Writing haiku's aint my thing
Japanese would cringe.

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 12:48 AM

Originally posted by RGB:
Damn I suck at these
Writing haiku's aint my thing
Japanese would cringe.

ROFL!
Yes, they aren't the best I've heard
But a nice effort.

I think I once heard
"HAIKUS MUST BE SEASONAL!!!"
I am not a pro.

thePurpleGiant · 01:09 AM

I have three black socks
Just because I lost one sock
Now I need another

EDIT:

The post I first wrote
Didn't follow the pattern
So I had to edit.

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 01:01 AM

Originally posted by thePurpleGiant:
I have three black socks
Just because I lost one other
Now I need another

Simply beautiful.
7.
5.

^- When words speak better than haiku.

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 01:03 AM

Originally posted by thePurpleGiant:
I have three black socks
Just because I lost one other
Now I need another

it's five-seven-five

as for your black sock problems
just lose one more sock!

thePurpleGiant · Aug 15, 2003, 01:10 AM

Originally posted by tintub:
it's five-seven-five
as for your black sock problems
just lose one more sock!

The post I first wrote
Didn't follow the pattern
So I had to edit.

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 01:14 AM

Originally posted by thePurpleGiant:
The post I first wrote
Didn't follow the pattern
So I had to edit.

SO HAD TO EDIT!
can you not count up to five?
Aussie schools at fault.

clam2000 · Aug 15, 2003, 01:18 AM

Originally posted by tintub:
SO HAD TO EDIT!
can you not count up to five?
Aussie schools at fault.

Hmm, Something's not right
'So Had To Edit' is just four
syllables I think

--will

thePurpleGiant · Aug 15, 2003, 01:19 AM

Originally posted by tintub:
SO HAD TO EDIT!
can you not count up to five?
Aussie schools at fault.

I can't write Haiku
I can't yet count to seven
One day I will learn

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 01:21 AM

Originally posted by thePurpleGiant:
I have three black socks
Just because I lost one sock
Now I need another

EDIT:

The post I first wrote
Didn't follow the pattern
So I had to edit.

NOW I NEED ONE MORE!
not "Now I need another!"
Just count up to five.

One. Two. Three. Four. Five.
the next line must have seven.
Then, again, it's five.

clam2000 · Aug 15, 2003, 01:22 AM

Originally posted by thePurpleGiant:
I can't write Haiku
I can't yet count to seven
One day I will learn

just add one to six
or three less then ten, I guess
seven can be your friend!

--will

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 01:23 AM

Originally posted by thePurpleGiant:
I can't write Haiku
I can't yet count to seven
One day I will learn

Look at that young man!
Perfection in just a few words!
Black belt in Haiku

clam2000 · Aug 15, 2003, 01:26 AM

Originally posted by tintub:
Look at that young man!
Perfection in just a few words!
Black belt in Haiku

Black belt in Haiku?
What? an obscure martial art?
Guess I'll never know

--will

thePurpleGiant · Aug 15, 2003, 01:29 AM

Originally posted by tintub:
Look at that young man!
Perfection in just a few words!
Black belt in Haiku

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 01:32 AM

Originally posted by tintub:
Look at that young man!
Perfection in just a few words!
Black belt in Haiku

Argh! Now look at me!
I cannot count to seven.
Don't I look the fool

clam2000 · Aug 15, 2003, 01:33 AM

Originally posted by thePurpleGiant:

The grins will work fine
'smile' gets old after just five
seven times is too much

--will

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 01:34 AM

Originally posted by clam2000:
Hmm, Something's not right
'So Had To Edit' is just four
syllables I think

--will

So. Had. To. Ed. it.
and "sev. en. can. be. your. friend."?
That sure is not five

tintub · Aug 15, 2003, 01:37 AM

Originally posted by clam2000:
The grins will work fine
'smile' gets old after just five
seven times is too much

--will

seven counts as two
i must be more into maths
i like strict haiku

clam2000 · Aug 15, 2003, 01:40 AM

Originally posted by tintub:
So. Had. To. Ed. it.
and "sev. en. can. be. your. friend."?
That sure is not five

O.K. that's my fault
I used them as only one
sorry about that

--will

clam2000 · Aug 15, 2003, 01:48 AM

ughh, I've got to sleep
or tomorrow will be bad
so good night to all

--will

Stradlater · Aug 15, 2003, 02:37 AM

Originally posted by clam2000:
ughh, I've got to sleep
or tomorrow will be bad
so good night to all

--will

Sweet slumber to thee;
Delicate dreams pass through you
While I sit awake.

Mastrap · Aug 15, 2003, 02:47 AM

rain has overnight
refreshed the air finally
now it's too damn cold

soul searching · Aug 15, 2003, 04:02 AM

must be up in five
(this coffee is very darn good)
hours, just want to sleep

Ahora todos
vamonos a la playa!
nunca regresar

sniffer · Aug 15, 2003, 04:12 AM

Sorry for my ignorance, but what is the Haiku thing anyway?

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 04:37 AM

Thanks for the pick-up
Life turned upside-down tonight
Haikus make fun reads

Mastrap · 05:23 AM

Originally posted by sniffer:
Sorry for my ignorance, but what is the Haiku thing anyway?

Fire up google
look up 'haiku instructions'
all will become clear

From http://www.haikugallery.com/

What's a haiku?

A haiku is a kind of poem, originally developed in Japan and now popular all over the world._ Today, you can find haiku adapted for any language.
_

What does an English haiku look like?
_
An English haiku typically has three lines; the first has two accents in five syllables, the second has three accents in seven syllables, and the last has two accents in five syllables.
_
__On this still hot day,
____only the sound of soft grass
______in the beaks of ducks. ______(Claire Pratt)
_
__ the flick of high beams ---
__out of the dark roadside ditch
__leaps a tall grass clump ___(Paul O. Williams)
_
Using all seventeen syllables yields graceful English, but the full English haiku form is then longer than the original Japanese haiku form. _There can be fewer syllables as long as the accents are there. _
_
__The white spider
____whiter still
______in the lightning's flash___(Geraldine C. Little)_
_ _
__Jeep tracks
____over deer tracks
______in new snow _______(William R. Mosolino)_
_
A 'kireji' (cutting pause) usually divides the haiku into two distinct rhythmic units; either 5 beats followed by 3 (when the kireji isolates the last line, as in the previous example), or 3 beats followed by 5 (when it isolates the first line, as in the next example). _
_
__the aster blossoms.
__the glittering of dew drops
_'til after noontime. ___ ___(Karel Hellemans)
_
__ where peonies bloom
_____the tomcat lurks and watches
__________falls asleep. ______ (Beverly White)
_
In haiku, grammar is pared down. Incomplete sentences abound. Use of articles and prepositions is minimal.
_
_
What can you say in just three lines?
__
Traditionally, a haiku recreates a contemplative natural experience. _Although short, a fine haiku causes the reader to experience its subject at length. The resulting sensations are the whole point of the haiku. _The rhythmic structure of a haiku yields a sense of incompleteness, inviting the reader to wait with it.
_
__Just enough of rain
__To bring the smell of silk
__From umbrellas______ (Richard Wright)
_
_
Are there any other 'rules' for writing haiku?
_
Traditionally, the experience explored in the haiku must take place in a defined season --- spring, summer, fall, or winter. _The season is revealed, often quite subtly, by a 'kigo' (season word) in the text. The sensations induced by the haiku are triggerred by the seasonal cue as well by the particular subject matter.
_
__Only scattered stars,
__till the moon wakens clusters
__of saguaro flowers.______ (Foster Jewell)
_

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 04:40 AM

Forgive and forget?
Or completely move away
leaving all behind?

Which method is best
For sure, I have no idea
Must decide today.

7Macfreak · Aug 15, 2003, 04:41 AM

There has not been one.
As creative as this.
That is what is definite.

Mastrap · Aug 15, 2003, 04:50 AM

Originally posted by RGB:
Forgive and forget?
Or completely move away
leaving all behind?

Which method is best
For sure, I have no idea
Must decide today.

a bad dilemma
must do what your heart tells you
or maybe your brain

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 04:59 AM

Originally posted by Mastrap:
a bad dilemma
must do what your heart tells you
or maybe your brain

This one time only
The euphamized male organ
Has no say at all

Stradlater · Aug 15, 2003, 05:08 AM

A fluttering moth
disrupts the flow of photons.
Shadows on my face.

The bright monitor
is the only lantern left.
'lectric candlelight.

Apple menu: Sleep.
I wish it was so easy.
Insomnia sucks.

Mastrap · Aug 15, 2003, 05:09 AM

Originally posted by RGB:
This one time only
The euphamized male organ
Has no say at all

To offer advice
in situations like this
is not often wise

Mastrap · Aug 15, 2003, 05:13 AM

Heat wave has broken
early morning brings fresh rain
trees shiny green

RGB · Aug 15, 2003, 05:33 AM

Originally posted by Mastrap:
To offer advice
in situations like this
is not often wise

If only my friends
Could grasp this simple concept:
"None of your business"

ratlater · Aug 15, 2003, 10:15 AM

My Balls
by Jackson Faddis
ghost-written by Brendan Sweeney

Big, Round, Beautiful
Slightly Asymetrical,
But otherwise fine.

http://www.thewonderllama.com/haikus/

-matt

dav · Aug 15, 2003, 11:58 AM

excruciating
individualistic
metamorphosis

Stradlater · Aug 15, 2003, 12:09 PM

Whispering outside
A tree branch hits my window
Metallic tapping

Mastrap · Aug 15, 2003, 12:16 PM

Clouds race
across blue sky
darkness falls

Stradlater · Aug 15, 2003, 12:26 PM

Different plants appear
The product of commingling
Cross-pollination

Stradlater · Aug 15, 2003, 12:28 PM

Originally posted by Mastrap:
Clouds race
across blue sky
darkness falls

More traditional,
Not quite so many of these
syllabic bound'ries

boardsurfer · Aug 15, 2003, 12:33 PM

Haiku difficult
this post took seven minutes
I need more practice

Stradlater · Aug 15, 2003, 12:40 PM

Originally posted by boardsurfer:
Haiku difficult
this post took seven minutes
I need more practice

Keep on practicing!
It can be a lot of fun
Wordplay without friends

My 400th post
I'd have a long way to go
"Clinically insane"

Mastrap · Aug 15, 2003, 12:45 PM

Rain drops
on my window
glittering

maxelson · Aug 15, 2003, 12:55 PM

I have deja vu
it seems to me that I am
reviewing bad dreams

Stradlater · Aug 15, 2003, 01:25 PM

One begins wond'ring
What provokes a summer rain
Removing clothing