[urbatronik]

Hello

what you think about this stuff?

http://www.geocities.com/psytrancertrip


thanks in advance

(and PLEASE..dont look at the "design" of that free space, thanks)

[Randman]

Hola,

I like most of the colors in use but the wavy lines distracted me. Made my eye float off the pages much quicker, especially without any single dominant image to keep me on the page.
Fonts were nice but the type looked a bit small, but so did the small photos.
I really didn't like the mobile phone advert. The green pattern really distracted as it's not a pleasing shade of green and the shape reminded me of a map for a stadium or convention hall.

Sorry to be critical. I think they were solid designs. I'd just reduce the wavy lines and introduce a dominant element and they would be much better.

[urbatronik]

thanks

I put this here because i need critical people and neutral people..

thanx a lot, im gonna take care of that details

(need more critics)

bye

[siliconwarrior]

I wouldn't value too highly the opinion of someone who cannot differentiate between an advert and packaging.

Keep up the good work.

[Randman]

Originally posted by siliconwarrior:
I wouldn't value too highly the opinion of someone who cannot differentiate between an advert and packaging.

Keep up the good work.

So, I put the wrong word. Feel free to ignore me. All I can say is I'm a graphic/layout designer with about 15 years of professional experience and a goodly number of design awards.

But, you are right. My critique pales in comparison with yours. Yours is so insightful and such an economy of words in mentioning eye flow, color palettes and dominant/non-dominant visuals and fontography.
Oh, to learn from such a valued master who has so much to contribute rather than make silly comments about a small point without really having any basis for such small comments.

[art_director]

is this your book? if so it's on the thin side.

� packaging -- looks nice but it would be better if you were to comp it up and shoot it. don't show flats. show it the way it will be seen on the shelves. often people will comp up and shoot their packaging actually on a shelf. can also show in a non-descript background / environment. computer generatedmodels work but they lack the soul of a shot comp.

� folleto -- a brochure??? nice, clean, elegant...i love the palette and design. you're a natural with this particular medium. that much is clear.

� fresh it wordmark -- it's weak when put next to some of your other work. not saying it's bad but your brochure is in a different league than this logo.

� magazine ads -- these lack a focus. when art directors try to design logos and packaging they don't usually do well. when designers try to layout ads they don't do well. they're different media / audiences. i suggest checking out ca advertising annual, the one show, archive, etc. they'll give you some inspiration for ad design / layout. these feel a little direct response and are not on par with your other pieces.

� minimal contradictions -- student project? feels like and exercise. what's it supposed to be? sorry if i missed something.

� your personal logo is mighty cool.

� theme -- you appear to like the color blue and wavy lines. i suggest switching it up. the stuff begins to look similar / the same. explore other graphic languages / elements. i'm not saying what you're doing is bad, rather it doesn't differentiate your clients brands from one another.

[andi*pandi]

linky no worky.

[art_director]

Originally posted by andi*pandi:
linky no worky.

the stuff be gone...

[urbatronik]

thanx all for the replies..

i guess it was good to show some of my work here, all of you were so honest telling what was good and what wasn't (that is what i needed).

[Eyenovation]

The Telefonica stuff is top notch.
Do you have a picture, even a rough one, of how it looked once printed?